Title: Qilin
Author: GW Katrina aka [livejournal.com profile] icedark_elf
Beta: [livejournal.com profile] forgottenlover
Theme and Number: 5 - Haunting or Occult Freak for [livejournal.com profile] 10_au
Genres: AU, Fantasy Modern
Warnings/Disclaimers: Not mine, of course, though the world they are in is.
Fandom: Final Fantasy VII
Pairing: Sephiroth/Zack/Cloud
Rating: PG-13
Wordcount: 7,687
Summary: Haunted by dreams, Zack has no idea what changes await him.

Edit: Took this down for a while. Now reposting at my IJ account.

From: [identity profile] forgottenlover.livejournal.com


hopefully this time I didn't go missing stuff ::sits on it::

From: [identity profile] icedark-elf.livejournal.com


Thank you. I have pretty images in my head and I need to figure out how to bribe people you in order for them to be drawn. Cause, yeah, I such with the artness.

From: [identity profile] icedark-elf.livejournal.com


*grins*

I already have at least one other idea figured out, at least the concept for it.

Sephiroth. Zack. Cloud. Actors. *giggles to self*

Glad you seemed to like this.

From: [identity profile] yuenoclow.livejournal.com


Found a couple of typos. *cough*

especially or a spirit touched couple.

I think you meant for there...

He sighed, still coming Zack’s hair with his fingers.

The combing is missing it's b...

It really had been a long time since Zack had slept beside anyone, but once he had gotten used to is, he’d been gone.

This sentence just confused me. "Gotten used to is, he'd been gone"? The "he'd been gone" is bad grammar, 'cause without the contraction its "he would been gone", which... yeah. Um, I think you want to fix that one, if only so I can figure out what exactly you were going for. *sweatdrop*

Erm, that's all I spotted. Anyway, I *love* this fic! Really interesting. Should be fun to see what else you have in store for us! *grin*

From: [identity profile] ithronluin.livejournal.com


whoa. talk about a massive plot bunny o__o

From: [identity profile] forgottenlover.livejournal.com


he'd also means he had, I'm pretty sure ::pokes the typos she missed with a grimace:: damn it, I'm going to start running multiple checks on these.

though it's to it, and I think that's where it died ::fails as a beta::

From: [identity profile] yuenoclow.livejournal.com


I never really bother correcting the its/it's in other people's writing. ...Mostly 'cause I have *no* clue, since I get that one mixed up constantly. *sigh*

From: [identity profile] icedark-elf.livejournal.com


Fixed. That gone I changed to "out like a light"

So, tell me, what did you think, other than the typos?

From: [identity profile] icedark-elf.livejournal.com


I had the guardian part down since I first figured out the idea for it. The rest of the stupid plot refused to come together till the other day.

Do you like it, though? *pokes the massive thing* Stupid giant bunny.

From: [identity profile] icedark-elf.livejournal.com


Is that a good wow or a bad one? *snugs*

I already got plans for the next of the [livejournal.com profile] 10_au stories, but next up is wibble fic and AC.

From: [identity profile] yuenoclow.livejournal.com


*blinksu* I thought I said that I loved it. *checks* Yup, I did. Seriously, it was a really cool idea! Reading the other AUs will be a lot of fun if they all turn out as interesting as this.

From: [identity profile] ladynero.livejournal.com


that's a good and stunned 'wow'...

ya know the kind when something's *great* but ya just can't put it into words since your brain just shut down by the magnificense of it all....

From: [identity profile] icedark-elf.livejournal.com


Ooh, I missed it in the italics. *coughs*

I have one planned out for 3 - Put Your Happy Face On or Smile. Sephiroth, Zack, Cloud-actors. Cloud hates it because, since the troupe has no female actors and the women who do work it refuse to get onstage, he gets stuck playing the girl. Lots.

From: [identity profile] yuenoclow.livejournal.com


*rolls her eyes* Yeah, I was annoyed when I realized I'd done that... I wish they let you edit your comments here, 'cause that'd be a *really* useful thing, what with all the times I manage to screw them up...

*dieschokedies* Once again, Cloud ends up in a dress! Ah hell... *giggle-fit* Does that make Aeris the director? I have problems seeing anyone else managing to get Cloud into drag...

From: [identity profile] icedark-elf.livejournal.com


*snickers* I do think AC and Gracious are my two most popular stories, you know?

Hard to believe they are both over a year old now. That's the longest I've ever worked on any fic.

From: [identity profile] icedark-elf.livejournal.com


*blushes* I want to keep you. You give awesome compliments.

Thank you and I'm glad you liked it so much.


From: [identity profile] yuenoclow.livejournal.com


Heh, from the sound of it, you'll likely still be working on Gracious another year from now.

From: [identity profile] icedark-elf.livejournal.com


I'm sure she'll be a part of it somehow.


Seph and Zack trade off the bad guy/good guy role, but poor Cloud always seems to end up the damsel.

From: [identity profile] yuenoclow.livejournal.com


And he makes the perfect damsel in distress, 'cause he's distressed at being the damsel. *snerk* Poor Cloud...

From: [identity profile] icedark-elf.livejournal.com


*cough* It can be my ongoing Nano project or something.

*looks at notes* Almost done with the first book.... Interlude four-six and the chapters.

From: [identity profile] yuenoclow.livejournal.com


That's saying something right there. The *first* book.

From: [identity profile] kemis.livejournal.com


*squees* OMG, the love, the coolness of the topic, haunted!tired!Zack and mysterious!Cloud and Seph. The uber-shinyness is blinding! *puts on sunglasses and squees more*

From: [identity profile] icedark-elf.livejournal.com


*snickers* Glad you like, wifey number two. Zack was getting so flustered not knowing what was going on, and I'd be haunted to if Hojo and Jenova kept pushing themselves into my dreams.

From: [identity profile] ladynero.livejournal.com


*grins* I dunno... my fiance might object to you keeping me unless he can take pictures. *smirks*

From: [identity profile] the-perkygoff.livejournal.com


"It really had been a long time since Zack had slept beside anyone, but once he had gotten used to is, he’d been out like a light."

Is -> it

"Blue eyes, so dark they were almost black, fixed on Zack. “This city lost is qilin, Zachary..."

Is -> it's

"“The qilin went to sleep, leaving his demon-phoenix and her western dragon without a balancing force...”"

Genderswap!materia? XD Just kidding, but should there be a switch from his to her in that sentence? I could be reading it wrong.

Now that I'm done with that part of that: ...Ohh snuggles. Lovely, lovely fic. Are we going to see any spin offs in this AU? Really fasinating, great stuff. Wow, I wish I were more prolific. XD You basically win.

From: [identity profile] akahoshi.livejournal.com


this AU-mythology-world-verse-thing is just breath taking. I really loved the way the story unfolded and built up into great layers. I had to pimp it to my circle (none of whom are final fantasy fans). Everyone was enchanted. Now I am just helplessly greedy for more *grabby hands*

From: [identity profile] icedark-elf.livejournal.com


Thank you for the first two fixes. And the his/her thing is right. Qilin's demon-phoenix and the d-p's dragon. So his/her

As for spin offs, I have no idea. But I did have shiny fun with it, and I'm glad you liked it.

I do hope the other AUs come out this well.

From: [identity profile] icedark-elf.livejournal.com


*grins* I'm glad they enjoyed it. Glad you did as well.

I'm slowly getting better with my world building, and I'm happy it's gone to good use. I do hope you enjoy the other AUs to come.

From: [identity profile] the-perkygoff.livejournal.com


Gotcha. That's how I thought that last one might be read, but had to make sure.

Twas a very good and shiny thing, that it was.

From: [identity profile] ithronluin.livejournal.com


like it? heck, love it. XD

been lurking at your fics for a long while, you made me like the threesome 8D;;;

From: [identity profile] desdemona-marx.livejournal.com


This is an absolutly beautiful piece of writing. Well thought out, well exacuted. Brilliant. Truly. The plot was engaging, and the dialogue was perfect. The imagery gave me chills, seriously.

Beautiful work. I think I might have to begin stalking your writing *smiles happily*.

From: [identity profile] icedark-elf.livejournal.com


*grins* Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it so much, and if you do start to check out my other pieces, I hope you enjoy them just as much.

From: [identity profile] akuma-no-kage.livejournal.com


*squees* Loved the mythological elements woven into the fic.

And I think I found another typo:
Anything more Sephiroth was going to say was lost as Jenova screeched and attacted.
attacted -> attacked

From: [identity profile] icedark-elf.livejournal.com


My poor beta, I need to listen to her more. >.>

And I'm glad you liked it. I had fun with the prompt once I had some clue of where it was going.

From: [identity profile] cateared-psycho.livejournal.com


i liked this fic, even though it was a little weird. i do wish that you hadn't let it end like that though. it didn't feel finished. it was a creepy fic, but a good one nontheless.

From: [identity profile] icedark-elf.livejournal.com


I'm glad at least a little of the creepy came through. And the end was supposed to be a little rushed and such, cause that's how the situation was. And I'm horrid at times.

Glad you liked it, and I hope you enjoy the others AUs.

From: [identity profile] sakura-no-prey.livejournal.com


Good fic as always =D and er

You the new tenet?” I think you wanted tenant instead?

From: [identity profile] yuenoclow.livejournal.com


*flails* But! But! I wanted to re-read it! Wahhh...

From: [identity profile] yuenoclow.livejournal.com


*flyingtackleglomp* THANKYOUTHANKYOUTHANKYOU!!! That was going to drive me *nuts* until I could read it again! It's so annoying when I go to re-read a fic I like and find it's disappeared. *kicks GWYaoi.com*
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