Awwww...only thing missing was Cloud ordering Zack into the bed with them *grin*

Spotted one possible mistake:
Frowning, Cloud sighed, and then went to look for the phone. Maybe he could find a few friends to stay will for the week or so it took Zack to get back.

Is the 'will' supposed to be a 'with'?

Yay for Seph/Cloud shagging. Bet they did lots of catching up in that two week period of no Zack *pets poor Zacky*